A quick review
Dec. 20th, 2003 12:13 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
sparkindarknessHaving looked through my files, it seems that Spark in Darkness, the main plotline with Rick and Darren has now reached nearly 75,000 words. When did that happen?
Some of the early stuff I look at and can't believe I wrote it, cringe-ness is happening here.
Both Rick and Darren have changed. In Darren's case, I'm fairly comfortable with it as character development - he's less afraid, less angsty, less dangerous in some ways, but more casual with his power in others. He's learned to enjoy things now and then.
Rick? Now it COULD be just character development, but I'm not sure. I think in part Rick just wasn't as dominant in my head as Darren, so the person he started as isn;t the person he became. I've tried to fight it, but he definitely seems to be resolving into something I didn't originally envisage - he's more serious, less care free, less irresponsible, less fun, less rebelious and wild, but at the same time, he's a lot less of a backing character than I first thought. He certainly was never going to be facing down or being involved in any way with the Camaalis clan.
Things I wish I'd changed/am going to change?
Timing. Out of desire to get to the action, the first meeting of Rick and Darren is rushed. They tumble into each other's beds and hearts ridiculously quickly. rick was supooised to take longer to find him. Months, maybe even a year has actually passed between Rick and Darren first moving in and Darren getting Ahrimadan. There's not enough of their standard life in the story, they seem to be running form Camaalis threat to Camaalis threat, which is wrong, there's a minimum of one month between each seperate attack. I need to go back and do some patching and filling - Darren transforming Rick's flat and wardrobe. Rick taking Darren clubbing. Rick's work. Darren's work.
Yup, some inserts are needed.
Some of the early stuff I look at and can't believe I wrote it, cringe-ness is happening here.
Both Rick and Darren have changed. In Darren's case, I'm fairly comfortable with it as character development - he's less afraid, less angsty, less dangerous in some ways, but more casual with his power in others. He's learned to enjoy things now and then.
Rick? Now it COULD be just character development, but I'm not sure. I think in part Rick just wasn't as dominant in my head as Darren, so the person he started as isn;t the person he became. I've tried to fight it, but he definitely seems to be resolving into something I didn't originally envisage - he's more serious, less care free, less irresponsible, less fun, less rebelious and wild, but at the same time, he's a lot less of a backing character than I first thought. He certainly was never going to be facing down or being involved in any way with the Camaalis clan.
Things I wish I'd changed/am going to change?
Timing. Out of desire to get to the action, the first meeting of Rick and Darren is rushed. They tumble into each other's beds and hearts ridiculously quickly. rick was supooised to take longer to find him. Months, maybe even a year has actually passed between Rick and Darren first moving in and Darren getting Ahrimadan. There's not enough of their standard life in the story, they seem to be running form Camaalis threat to Camaalis threat, which is wrong, there's a minimum of one month between each seperate attack. I need to go back and do some patching and filling - Darren transforming Rick's flat and wardrobe. Rick taking Darren clubbing. Rick's work. Darren's work.
Yup, some inserts are needed.
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Date: 2003-12-20 02:45 pm (UTC)*G* can You guess which chat never actually was played between the charaters, (but sould have)? ;-)
If not ten I'm not tellin. There's likely to be a few more filler stories. But hey, I know ya can do it man. Lookin forward to the filler stories.
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Date: 2003-12-21 12:37 am (UTC)*considers* no... it is difficult. If I ahd to choose, I would say the ones with more emotional context, this is from experience in RPs, only the best players are willing to let you explain emotion, thought and worry of a character - even so far as facial expression. Many sadly restrict themselves to action
Thank you for the vote fo confidence, but I think they'll come later... then again, this is a good time now things have "settled"